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So, instead of saying, “Melissa was sad” (which is telling the reader), you might try something like:
Tears welled in the corners of Melissa’s eyes. Her bottom lip trembled. Taking a deep breath, I reached for a tissue and handed it to her, just as the first teardrop rolled along her cheek.
Even though I know the difference, sometimes it’s hard to determine what parts of my story could use more “showing” vs “telling” — and even, how.
Here are a couple of ways you can let the reader see:
1. Use dialogue
2. Use all the senses — taste, touch, scent, sight, and smell
3. Use great adjectives and strong verbs
Go through your own writing. Are there places you can SHOW the reader what’s happening? How can you expand on them? Want to learn more? There are many writing craft books you can check out, but Show & Tell in a Nutshell by Jessica Bell has exercises so you can learn by...showing. <grin>
— Chase Superman Duffy